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That Paragraph Makes You Look Fat.
You're showing too much information.
Why don't you put on some prose?
Accessorize with a metaphor or two.
But still your final draft is disgusting.
Your adjectives are all wrong.
You are such a hyperbole,
Look at the way you overdo the cliches.
Your diction makes you ignorant,
While my free verse shows my eloquence.
For a climax, I will admit one thing,
Your imagery is quite amusing.
And I hate the irony of our juxtaposition.
But alas, you are the antonym to my synonym.
-I quite LOVE the way I wrote this. Haha.
-Photo goes because of the first two lines. Except, look at it as "put on some clothes" instead of "prose"
-Full Size?
-Late D:
6:14
11/22/09
You're showing too much information.
Why don't you put on some prose?
Accessorize with a metaphor or two.
But still your final draft is disgusting.
Your adjectives are all wrong.
You are such a hyperbole,
Look at the way you overdo the cliches.
Your diction makes you ignorant,
While my free verse shows my eloquence.
For a climax, I will admit one thing,
Your imagery is quite amusing.
And I hate the irony of our juxtaposition.
But alas, you are the antonym to my synonym.
-I quite LOVE the way I wrote this. Haha.
-Photo goes because of the first two lines. Except, look at it as "put on some clothes" instead of "prose"
-Full Size?
-Late D:
6:14
11/22/09
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I'm so jealous of your writing skills. Your poems always seem to have so much meaning in them. I'm sorry I don't post comments on your posts often, I'm never really on Buzznet anymore :P
  
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thanks love. and neither am I >_< everything is late DX
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I love the photo and the poem! Especially the poem; its really creative :D
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